This week in writing we wrote a six sentence story about creating a character and adding detail .Our focus was on creating sentences.We learnt that the four criteria of a sentence are ...one mane idea has to makes sense a space before each word starts with a capital letter and ends with a full stop.
I am a Year 6 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. My teacher is Mrs Jones. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Thursday, March 21, 2019
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
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Hi Kaela, I really like your six sentence story that you write about princess Hollie. You have add so many wow words in your story. Maybe next time you can add so many more details about your story. Is your favorite colour is blue or something else?
ReplyDeleteHi Kaela, Miss Goslin here, thanks for posting your six sentence story. I love the reason Princess Hollie broke her arm! Very creative. This story is great but next time you could add some more detail. What is a cool forest?
ReplyDeleteLooking forward to hearing back from you.
Miss Goslin
thank you so much for commenting on my blog and thank you for giving me good feed back i will work on that next time thank you Miss Goslin
ReplyDeleteand jyoshika
ReplyDeletehi kaela i like how you said once upon a time at the start.maybe nextime add more detail into it. by sovereign
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